In this excerpt historian Julie Charlip uses many techniques to distinguish what she is saying from what others are saying. It starts off with her clearly stating "Marx and Engels wrote..." which clearly shows she is sourcing someone else. There is a transition to her own opinion when she says "it seems..." because it's showing that she is using her personal thoughts. Another example of a They Say is "His definition..." when referring to an opinion of a professor. A very clear example of an I Say is "I always felt" which transitions into her own feelings.
Overall, she does a great job letting the reader know who is saying what. You know when she is trying to show others opinions while at the same time letting you know which is her own thoughts. Also, I noticed that she does a great job of using other people's quotes to strengthen her own. This gives her quotes much more power within her paper.
Tuesday, March 24, 2009
Sunday, March 22, 2009
They Say, I Say: Chpt. 4, Exer. 1
Jane Anyon uses other sources to discuss the affect of diversity within various educational facilities. It is very hard to distinguish whether she disagreed or agreed on the subject in the beginning because she didn't put what she thought in between the quotes. It awkwardly ends with her stating that even though there has been much argumentation over the matter, very little research has actually taken place. Overall, I feel she does not sufficiently discuss her view on the subject.
Tuesday, March 17, 2009
Exercise 7.j
1. This layout and design closely resembles that of a magazine or even a newspaper. The use of headlines really gives it a newspaper feel because the text is broken up into sections. Also, the use of multiple pictures to give the reader a more visual understanding of the topic gives it a magazine feel. Overall, this is very different from the the average research paper. Nobody reading this would ever get bored which breaks the monotone stereotype that is usually associated with research papers.
2. The appearance of this paper would greatly influence the way her audience approaches it. When I first glanced over it I wasn't dreading reading it at all since it had cool pictures and headlines which make it seem shorter. By giving it a more inviting layout and design she already gave herself a little boost before her audience even reads the first word. This gives the audience a more positive outlook which in turns helps out the author get the message across easier.
3. If this paper was changed to look more like a typical research paper she would have lost what I talked about in the previous question. She wouldn't get the optimistic feeling of the reader prior to reading it. If I were to see this paper without the pictures and headlines I would have dreaded reading it. Like I said earlier, the design gives her an edge from the start.
2. The appearance of this paper would greatly influence the way her audience approaches it. When I first glanced over it I wasn't dreading reading it at all since it had cool pictures and headlines which make it seem shorter. By giving it a more inviting layout and design she already gave herself a little boost before her audience even reads the first word. This gives the audience a more positive outlook which in turns helps out the author get the message across easier.
3. If this paper was changed to look more like a typical research paper she would have lost what I talked about in the previous question. She wouldn't get the optimistic feeling of the reader prior to reading it. If I were to see this paper without the pictures and headlines I would have dreaded reading it. Like I said earlier, the design gives her an edge from the start.
Thursday, February 19, 2009
Persepolis -- Draft 2
The graphic novel Persepolis is a graphic representation about the Iranian Revolution through the eyes of a little girl names Marjane Satrapi. This story was developed into a movie that closely resembled that of the graphic novel. Many of the movie characteristics are directly from the graphic novel.
The graphic novel used simple images with great dialogue to tell the story. The novel is in black and white, as is the majority of the movie, leaving much of the detail to the imagination of the viewer. Leaving room for the viewer’s imagination to go to work allows the viewer to feel a part of the story. Famous movie critic Robert Ebert agrees when he states, “The style is deliberately two-dimensional, avoiding the illusion of depth in current animation. This approach may sound spartan, but it is surprisingly involving, wrapping us in this autobiography that distills an epoch into a young women's life”. Satrapi forces the reader to focus on the ideas of the comics rather than the elaborate illustrations as does the movie. McCloud agrees when he states, “The ability of cartoons to focus our attention on an idea is, I think, an important part of their special power”. The movie seemed to be fast paced and moved quickly through the frames found in the comic book. Though it takes getting used to, it moves at the same pace as the comic book does as you read it. The movie is shown like a comic book should be shown. The comic book feel makes the movie much more “cartoony” and the author can do much more with the cinematography. The movie used no flashy special effects and really made me feel like I was back in time in the Iranian Revolution.
Overall, the movie is a good representation of the graphic novel. The movie’s beginning differs from the novel in that it begins in present day represented in color. The novel jumps right into the young girl’s life in a less dramatic fashion. The movie adds more scenes and makes other scenes from the novel shorter. This makes it easier for the reader to imagine what Marjane was going through using easier images. The grandma plays a key role in both works because she is the anchor for Marjane. She is always the person that Marjane goes to for advice and is always on Marjane’s conscience. The movie and the novel greatly represented the moments when the feeling was somber or happy through sound or the lack of sound. By the overall demeanor of the dialogue the reader knows what the tone is supposed to be. Marjane is known to not hold back her feelings.
Both the graphic novel and the film inform the reader about the Iranian Revolution in a different perspective from that of the history books. Marjane achieved her purpose to show people that all Iranian people aren’t crazy radicals. She showed a different side of a Revolution that had many world-wide influences. The film accurately portrays what the novel was trying to do. Even thought the film left a few elements out, it still accomplished the overall purpose.
The graphic novel used simple images with great dialogue to tell the story. The novel is in black and white, as is the majority of the movie, leaving much of the detail to the imagination of the viewer. Leaving room for the viewer’s imagination to go to work allows the viewer to feel a part of the story. Famous movie critic Robert Ebert agrees when he states, “The style is deliberately two-dimensional, avoiding the illusion of depth in current animation. This approach may sound spartan, but it is surprisingly involving, wrapping us in this autobiography that distills an epoch into a young women's life”. Satrapi forces the reader to focus on the ideas of the comics rather than the elaborate illustrations as does the movie. McCloud agrees when he states, “The ability of cartoons to focus our attention on an idea is, I think, an important part of their special power”. The movie seemed to be fast paced and moved quickly through the frames found in the comic book. Though it takes getting used to, it moves at the same pace as the comic book does as you read it. The movie is shown like a comic book should be shown. The comic book feel makes the movie much more “cartoony” and the author can do much more with the cinematography. The movie used no flashy special effects and really made me feel like I was back in time in the Iranian Revolution.
Overall, the movie is a good representation of the graphic novel. The movie’s beginning differs from the novel in that it begins in present day represented in color. The novel jumps right into the young girl’s life in a less dramatic fashion. The movie adds more scenes and makes other scenes from the novel shorter. This makes it easier for the reader to imagine what Marjane was going through using easier images. The grandma plays a key role in both works because she is the anchor for Marjane. She is always the person that Marjane goes to for advice and is always on Marjane’s conscience. The movie and the novel greatly represented the moments when the feeling was somber or happy through sound or the lack of sound. By the overall demeanor of the dialogue the reader knows what the tone is supposed to be. Marjane is known to not hold back her feelings.
Both the graphic novel and the film inform the reader about the Iranian Revolution in a different perspective from that of the history books. Marjane achieved her purpose to show people that all Iranian people aren’t crazy radicals. She showed a different side of a Revolution that had many world-wide influences. The film accurately portrays what the novel was trying to do. Even thought the film left a few elements out, it still accomplished the overall purpose.
Persepolis -- Draft 1
The graphic novel Persepolis is a graphic representation about the Iranian Revolution through the eyes of a little girl names Marjane Satrapi. This story was developed into a movie that closely resembled that of the graphic novel. There are many characteristics of the graphic novel and how it compares to the movie.
The graphic novel used simple images with great dialogue to tell the story. The novel was in black and white leaving much of the detail to the imagination of the reader. Leaving room for the reader’s imagination to go to work allows the reader to feel a part of the story. Like all comic books, Satrapi used the framing to her advantage. She used larger frames to emphasize importance and grab the reader’s attention. A lot of the frames that took up an entire page were dedicated to show imaginary images that were usually in Marjane’s head. The novel is split up into chapters to inform the reader what he/she should be looking for in that section. For example, the chapter F-14’s title was used to let the reader know that the importance is placed on the F-14’s that bombed Iraq.
The movie is a good representation of the graphic novel. The movie starts out in color and moves into black and white when talking about the past. This allows the reader to easily differentiate between the two time periods. The movie adds more scenes and makes other scenes from the novel shorter. This makes it easier for the reader to imagine what Marjane was going through. The movie is also portrayed in simple images in order to leave a lot of the imaging up to the reader. The grandma plays a key role in both works because she is the anchor for Marjane. She is always the person that Marjane goes to for advice and is always on Marjane’s conscience. The movie and the novel greatly represented the moments when the feeling was somber or happy. By the overall demeanor of the dialogue the reader knows what the tone is supposed to be.
Both the graphic novel and the film inform the reader about the Iranian Revolution in a different perspective from that of the history books. Marjane achieved her purpose to show people that all Iranian people aren’t crazy radicals. She showed a different side of a Revolution that had many world-wide influences. The film accurately portrays what the novel was trying to do. Even thought the film left a few elements out, it still accomplished the overall purpose.
The graphic novel used simple images with great dialogue to tell the story. The novel was in black and white leaving much of the detail to the imagination of the reader. Leaving room for the reader’s imagination to go to work allows the reader to feel a part of the story. Like all comic books, Satrapi used the framing to her advantage. She used larger frames to emphasize importance and grab the reader’s attention. A lot of the frames that took up an entire page were dedicated to show imaginary images that were usually in Marjane’s head. The novel is split up into chapters to inform the reader what he/she should be looking for in that section. For example, the chapter F-14’s title was used to let the reader know that the importance is placed on the F-14’s that bombed Iraq.
The movie is a good representation of the graphic novel. The movie starts out in color and moves into black and white when talking about the past. This allows the reader to easily differentiate between the two time periods. The movie adds more scenes and makes other scenes from the novel shorter. This makes it easier for the reader to imagine what Marjane was going through. The movie is also portrayed in simple images in order to leave a lot of the imaging up to the reader. The grandma plays a key role in both works because she is the anchor for Marjane. She is always the person that Marjane goes to for advice and is always on Marjane’s conscience. The movie and the novel greatly represented the moments when the feeling was somber or happy. By the overall demeanor of the dialogue the reader knows what the tone is supposed to be.
Both the graphic novel and the film inform the reader about the Iranian Revolution in a different perspective from that of the history books. Marjane achieved her purpose to show people that all Iranian people aren’t crazy radicals. She showed a different side of a Revolution that had many world-wide influences. The film accurately portrays what the novel was trying to do. Even thought the film left a few elements out, it still accomplished the overall purpose.
Sunday, February 15, 2009
Persepolis
I really enjoyed getting the chance to be introduced to graphic novels. This graphic novel was great because it gave a first hand account to the Iranian revolution. I really felt connected to Marjane and the movement itself after reading and watching it. My roommate is actually Iranian so it was good to have him as a reference while reading it. For people to band to together and at least attempt to overcome evil is always good to hear about. Makes me feel like no matter what people can always rely on each other. Since the movie was basically the comic book I felt it did a good job leaving a lot of the story to the readers imagination. The plain pictures made the reader/viewer really dive into the story and make it their own. They did leave out certain parts and cut some corners, but nothing that made me feel like it should be in there. Overall, I really enjoyed the "Persepolis experience".
Spiderman 2 critics
After reading both critics I think it's amazing that people can watch the same movie as me and come out with a completely different view. I have seen Spiderman 2 and agree with each person. I guess it's true that every person has a mind of their own.
I felt that Gilchrist focused a lot on the physical aspects of the movie. For most of his article he talked about how many of the scenes were too drawn out. He thought that a lot of the plot was beat into the audience while leaving out more important moments in the movie. He said that the first movie was a much better adaptation of the comic, in contrast to Ebert who thought the opposite. Gilchrist did say he liked the movie but couldn't help but be critical of it.
Ebert thought the movie was a masterpiece. He said that after he saw the first movie he was disappointed but after seeing this movie he thought that Raimi, movies director, did a marvelous job. He said that he thought the action and adventure depicted the characters dreams and wishes as does the comic. He was estastic about the fact that the movie concentrated more on the superheroes personal feelings rather than the superpowers. For example, he says the movie does a great job showing that the superpowers are actually a burden on Peter Parker. One of his last points was that the special effects were great. They made him feel apart of the movie and the action.
I felt that Gilchrist focused a lot on the physical aspects of the movie. For most of his article he talked about how many of the scenes were too drawn out. He thought that a lot of the plot was beat into the audience while leaving out more important moments in the movie. He said that the first movie was a much better adaptation of the comic, in contrast to Ebert who thought the opposite. Gilchrist did say he liked the movie but couldn't help but be critical of it.
Ebert thought the movie was a masterpiece. He said that after he saw the first movie he was disappointed but after seeing this movie he thought that Raimi, movies director, did a marvelous job. He said that he thought the action and adventure depicted the characters dreams and wishes as does the comic. He was estastic about the fact that the movie concentrated more on the superheroes personal feelings rather than the superpowers. For example, he says the movie does a great job showing that the superpowers are actually a burden on Peter Parker. One of his last points was that the special effects were great. They made him feel apart of the movie and the action.
Thursday, February 5, 2009
Weathermen
For my "off topic" blog this week I can't help but discuss the inadequacy of the weathermen of late. If I am not mistaken for the entire day Monday, the weathermen were predicting "2-6 inches of snow by Wednesday evening". Over the course of three days we got no more than a little bit over an inch. I'm not saying I want the weatherman to be perfect because let's face it, it's hard to predict the future. I am though, asking them to be less optimistic and raising the hopes of students nation wide that maybe, just maybe, they might get a day off from school.
Graff - Exercise 1
a. Various scientist's experiments suggest that there are dangerous levels of Chemical X in the Ohio groundwater.
b. It has become common today to state that this novel has certain flaw.
c. Few people think that football is boring.
d. Many sociologists claim that male students often dominate class discussions.
e. The majority of critics believe the film is really about the problems of romantic relationships.
f. Skeptical students are afraid that tempolates like the ones in theis book will stifle their creativity.
b. It has become common today to state that this novel has certain flaw.
c. Few people think that football is boring.
d. Many sociologists claim that male students often dominate class discussions.
e. The majority of critics believe the film is really about the problems of romantic relationships.
f. Skeptical students are afraid that tempolates like the ones in theis book will stifle their creativity.
Sunday, February 1, 2009
Eisner and McCloud
Even when I was a kid I never really read comics. I guess I read the occasional comic in the Sunday paper, but never consistently. So, when I read all of this analysis on the comics I was kind of blown away at the thought put into it.
Eisner had more a formal way to explain the art of comics. He talked a lot on how reading is now thought of as seeing letters on a page and what hey symbolically represent. He said that comics are when art and literature become one in our mind. Our mind comprehends both of these simultaneously. Comics are also repetitive images in order to drill certain ideas into the readers head. He said that comics interlock timing and rhythm through the action and framing throughout.
McCloud had a more enjoyable way to explore comics. I liked how he used comics to explain comics. He pointed out some very interesting things like how comics have the same idea as movies except comics don't always have the same frame space. He concentrated a lot on how words are just symbols and in our minds we put ideas to pictures. He also said our minds take simple cartoons and make them into reality when in reality, they are far from the an actual image.
Eisner had more a formal way to explain the art of comics. He talked a lot on how reading is now thought of as seeing letters on a page and what hey symbolically represent. He said that comics are when art and literature become one in our mind. Our mind comprehends both of these simultaneously. Comics are also repetitive images in order to drill certain ideas into the readers head. He said that comics interlock timing and rhythm through the action and framing throughout.
McCloud had a more enjoyable way to explore comics. I liked how he used comics to explain comics. He pointed out some very interesting things like how comics have the same idea as movies except comics don't always have the same frame space. He concentrated a lot on how words are just symbols and in our minds we put ideas to pictures. He also said our minds take simple cartoons and make them into reality when in reality, they are far from the an actual image.
Thursday, January 29, 2009
Exercise 4.m
When I decide to write a paper I always find a quiet place with little distractions. With distractions it's hard for me to stay focused and get all of my ideas out. I almost always write my paper on the computer. Even for an outline draft I like to use the computer because I can move whole sentences and delete anything I want with no issues. The conditions I write in are always comfortable. Being comfortable is very important because it takes away any distractions other than the paper itself. I usually make some sort of outline which eventually turns into a cluster. I try to just list out main points, but I usually end up clustering all of my ideas. For my drafting processes, I start with getting a thorough understanding of the assignment. Once I am confident on what the assignment is asking I develop my idea on what I need to accomplish. I then create a rough outline/cluster incorporating my audience and purpose. By this point I am ready to develop the paper in a more formal way. When I do this I begin to formulate my thesis. Once I get a rough thesis I work towards the final product and refine any previous work I had done. Revision is a huge part of my process because I am constantly going back and correcting my work as I read over it. Constant revision and thought is the key to a good paper. My ideal writing circumstances are being able to complete each step in my process smoothly. This is hard though because sometimes I get stuck on something that can mess up the process. I personally have no workshop experience but have, of course, revised peers' papers. I just have never had a formal revision process such as workshopping.
Tuesday, January 27, 2009
Genre Workshop
1. A genre workshop usually consists of the writer's first draft. The draft consists of more main points without the details. The paper will seem choppy, but the writer's purpose isn't for it to perfectly flow yet. The purpose is just to map out what is needed to be said. The audience is the reader of the paper when entering the workshop. The audience as a whole may not have been clearly set yet. The purpose and audience differ from the final paper because it may not be as clear in the beginning. Both aren't the main goal of the beginning draft.
2. If I were giving workshop feedback for EssayR I would have pointed out the grammatical errors for sure. I would have somehow pointed out that the paper doesn't flow too well, and some of the sentences could be combined. I wouldn't be overly critical, but just enough to help out the writer.
2. If I were giving workshop feedback for EssayR I would have pointed out the grammatical errors for sure. I would have somehow pointed out that the paper doesn't flow too well, and some of the sentences could be combined. I wouldn't be overly critical, but just enough to help out the writer.
Saturday, January 24, 2009
EssayR Evaluation
After reading the essay I noticed some grammatical errors such as when he said "WWE (World Wrestling Entertainment)", I feel like the writer should have used commas instead of parentheses. There were other gramatical errors such as misusing the version of "their" and not putting commas where they are supposed to be. Throughout the paper the writer could have combined sentences to make it flow much better. He/she was also inconsistent in his method of expressing numbers; he sometimes used words (sixty) and sometimes the number itself (60). When doing a research type paper using sources, the writer should cite more than one source.
Overall, I felt the paper got the writer's purpose across, but the flow of the paper was off. While reading it seemed like the writer was just spitting out facts. He/she had nothing in the paper to make it grab the reader. If I was grading this paper I would give it a C+.
Overall, I felt the paper got the writer's purpose across, but the flow of the paper was off. While reading it seemed like the writer was just spitting out facts. He/she had nothing in the paper to make it grab the reader. If I was grading this paper I would give it a C+.
Exercise 2.h
1. The rhetorical situation of the author is the election season, specifically the primary elections, in the spring of 2008. The purpose of his article is to explore the rhetoric used in an article written in the Collegiate Times. He used his article to show the use of pathos and logos in the article cited from the newspaper. His audience is primarily college students that read the newspaper. He explains how reporters use their position to attempt to persuade his/her readers.
2. One of the expectations of the genre is to have bias in the reporting. In my past experiences I have written in the analytical genre in various school assignments such as book critiques. I have also read multiple movie critiques and sports news reports.
3. The writer can achieve the same purpose for the same audience by submitting an editorial to the newspaper. The advantage to the editorial is that it will reach a wider audience to convey his message. Also, his article is about a newspaper article so the context is the same.
4. He could post his analysis in a different newspaper to reach a different audience. His purpose is still the same except with a different audience. This audience is limited to those who read that newspaper so it is very specific.
5. A teacher might use this genre convention in analyzing a book he/she is using for the class. He/she could break the book into parts in order to make it easier for students to understand. A social worker uses the same convention to break a child’s file into parts in order to work with different areas of the child’s life. A scientist also uses the convention to break a lab into parts in order to follow each direction precisely.
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