After reading the essay I noticed some grammatical errors such as when he said "WWE (World Wrestling Entertainment)", I feel like the writer should have used commas instead of parentheses. There were other gramatical errors such as misusing the version of "their" and not putting commas where they are supposed to be. Throughout the paper the writer could have combined sentences to make it flow much better. He/she was also inconsistent in his method of expressing numbers; he sometimes used words (sixty) and sometimes the number itself (60). When doing a research type paper using sources, the writer should cite more than one source.
Overall, I felt the paper got the writer's purpose across, but the flow of the paper was off. While reading it seemed like the writer was just spitting out facts. He/she had nothing in the paper to make it grab the reader. If I was grading this paper I would give it a C+.
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I agree with you and I actually gave the paper the same grade. The grammar problems were what really stuck out to me especially in a college paper. It was as if it hadn't been edited at all. I also thought that is was interesting that you pointed out that the paper didn't flow very well. I didn't mention that when I graded it but now that I think about it this was what made the paper the most awkward to read.
ReplyDeleteYeah I agree with you too. I was a little to easier on the grading, I gave it a B or B-. The writer didn't really seem to go back through his essay and reread it or make sure he had any grammatical errors. It seemed rushed and not very well thought out. It was factual but slightly boring to read.
ReplyDeleteI completely agree with you as well. The writer made many simple mistakes, and the flow of the paper was off. I also noticed that the writer seemed to use general knowledge instead of solid facts as you pointed out.
ReplyDeleteAfter reading your post I realized the grammatical errors and lack of flow were too blatant for the author to recieve a decent score, I guess I should've marked him lower
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